PDA

View Full Version : AAAlone's Haiku Review



AAAlone
06-18-2009, 11:04 PM
>> Edited to compile Haiku to-date in first post<<

I've been sitting on this idea for a while, but I think it's time...

I want to recognize some of the levels I've been playing, but don't have a lot of time to write lengthy reviews (during my coffee breaks ;)). What I can commit to is 17 syllables per review. That's right I'll review levels within a single haiku. Haiku (for those unaware) is a classic form of Japanese poetry. Though not typically a rhymed verse, the structure is defined by the cadence of syllables- 5 in the first line, 7 in the second, and 5 again in the third and final line. Got it? Good.

That's great AAAlone (you loony), but how can I request a review? I'm sorry but you can't. It's not that I don't want to review all your levels, it's just that I am a guilt junky. If I receive a request and don't get to it in a timely fashion, then I'll feel guilty about it and I don't need that.

So how are you gonna decide what to haiku-review then? I'm just working through authors that I've been chatting with, levels that I stumble across, recommendations in other posts, spotlighted levels, etc. In other words, I'll just review the levels that I'm playing anyway.

Hey, I thought I was your friend? Why haven't you reviewed my level? C’mon ! What did I just say about guilt? Honestly though, I am your friend. I'm not intentionally leaving anybody out. But I'm starting right.... wait for it... NOW. I'm sure I'll get to your level before too long. Just hang in there. (And besides, once you read some of my lame verse, I’m sure you’ll agree it’s a somewhat dubious honor.)

So let's begin.

Moving Parts by Gordy 2007

Dang! That’s my level!
What the??? He stole my level!
Man, that bums me out.


Aperture Science by Comphermc

I euthanized it--
My faithful companion cube.
The cake was a lie.


False Idols (1 and 2) by NinjamicWZ

Oh mortality!
The hourglass and Hand of God
Won’t let me forget


Hedge Maze by CheesyMcFly

A pleasant challenge
Set before us by The King
The maze was just right


The Snow Queen Trilogy by IceMaiden

They’re as beautiful
And as unique as snow-flakes.
Delightful—all three.


Just a Day at Sackboy Beach by Spider-Jew

A volleyball game,
Surfing, sea-life and pirates--
What more could you ask?


Assignment Housework by Brnxblze

Gotta do my chores?
Aw Mom! I don't wanna?
Hey! It's kinda fun!


Taken Part 1 (The Beginning) by RickRock_777

Taken by space men
from a dessolate desert
to puzzle goodness


Star Wars: The Empire Strikes Back: Dagobah... err... Etc... by JulesyJules

I loved this level
Yoda's Jedi challenges
make for great gaming!


Calamity Construction by Jackofcourse

Like boards, the puzzles
become something much greater
when nailed together


The Movies by Teebonesy

Post-modernism?
Creating films in a game?
It boggles the mind!


The Great Escape from Alcatraz, by AceStryker

I always knew it!
Mutant Crocs in the sewers!
A great first level


Tiger Woods Mini-Golf by CuzFeeshe

Oops! Missed the windmill.
Dang! That sphinx is hard to hit!
Best golf game out there.


Chromastone Chronicles Parts 1-4 by Morgana25

I am the “hemmed hero”
who recovered all four stones!
Would that there were more.


The Mental Institution Part 1 by Ygg_Barasil

While it may be true
that it’s sad sackboy went nutz
this dream is worth it.


HyperSphere by MrsSpookyBuz

So crisply designed
And so tightly constructed
Oh! Geometry!


Light by Coxy224

It’s merely a test.
Only a minute or two.
But what a minute!


The Tribe by Phife211

So enjoyable!
Subterranean puzzles
and a cool end boss.


Zilla's Neighborhood 2 by Godzillionaire

Game play is okay,
but the atmosphere is great!
very spooky woods.


Lone Ninja (series 1-4) by Coyote_blue

Hiyaaa! Ya! Take that!
Grappling hook and katana!
I am a ninja!


Robot Town 2 by Jump_Button

10 LOAD 'Robot Town'
20 EXECUTE 'Have Fun'
30 GOTO 10


Royal Love Letter (pts 1 & 2) by Luke/Mammett-box

Neither poison gas
nor a slithering snake boss
will stop this postman


The Miracle of Life By Poms

Ah, reproduction!
Neither as cute nor icky
As this great level.


Tribal Ruins by jackofcourse

Who’s added one more
Five-star level to the game?
Why Jack, Of course!


Ancient Land of Dinosaurs by Art_of_Tyler

Deep in the jungle
Amidst some great dinosaurs
I found all the eggs!


Little Big First Person Shooter by wildbill1217

After all these years
folks are still inovating!
wonderful surprise!





--cheers!

comphermc
06-19-2009, 12:15 AM
I love this. Great lyrical work, there.

Edit: I wish I could work that response into a haiku, but alas, I am lazy.

brnxblze
06-19-2009, 12:46 AM
LOL nice, very original.

robotiod
06-19-2009, 08:24 AM
Congradulations
those reviews are so great man
good luck with next week.




Ha ha posted in haiku

RickRock_777
06-19-2009, 07:08 PM
Resounding effects,
That will surely enlighten
Minds of young and old!

I'll visit this thread,
In hours with darkness looming,
As reviews unfold.


A very clever idea AAAlone:idea:, and I'm looking forward to seeing how you break down levels in this manner.

Rick

Morgana25
06-19-2009, 07:47 PM
Brilliantly clever
This thread of yours is epic
I'll check back later

I feel so creative now :)

robotiod
06-22-2009, 11:54 AM
Brilliantly clever
This thread of yours is epic
I'll check back later

I feel so creative now :)


Sorry Morgana but that first line has six syllables in.

v0rtex
06-22-2009, 12:25 PM
Sorry Morgana but that first line has six syllables in.

Brilliantly clever? has six syllables? I think you need a new abacus.

mindphaser74
06-22-2009, 03:46 PM
^^^^^^
bril-i-ant-ly cle-ver (this is 6):rolleyes:

comphermc
06-22-2009, 03:52 PM
Depends on how you say it. Us Americans pronounce it:
bril·liant·ly, where the middle "liant" sounds like "yint"

Morgana25
06-22-2009, 05:01 PM
brill iant ly cle var = 5 in my world. :)

Chalk it up to the midwestern accent.

AAAlone
06-22-2009, 07:02 PM
Now, now, let's not get hung up on how many sylables are in this or that word. Everyone has a slightly different cadence to their speech. Why, my uncle Zeek pronounces "pen" as if it has two syllables-- Pai-n. ;)

Just a couple more review today (crazy in the office today):

Assignment Housework by Brnxblze

Gotta do my chores?
Aw Mom! I don't wanna?
Hey! It's kinda fun!


Taken Part 1 (The Beginning) by RickRock_777

Taken by space men
from a dessolate desert
to puzzle goodness


Star Wars: The Empire Strikes Back: Dagobah... err... Etc... by JulesyJules

I loved this level
Yoda's Jedi challenges
make for great gaming!


Calamity Construction by Jackofcourse

Like boards, the puzzles
become something much greater
when nailed together


The Movies by Teebonesy

Post-modernism?
Creating films in a game?
It boggles the mind!

Pitcard
06-22-2009, 09:42 PM
Nice ideas, and a lovely way with words.

This should almost be in the recommended section, cause hearing these words makes me wanna check out some of these levels.

brnxblze
06-22-2009, 10:00 PM
LOL AAAlone, you're hilarious. I'll be looking forward to more of these :D .

CCubbage
06-22-2009, 10:49 PM
This is awesome stuff!

I'm now getting inspired to start a review section myself... maybe "2 word" reviews.....?

Tye Dye - Awesome exemplified!
Cat vs Jaguar - Bleecchh! (I only needed one word here...)


Looking forward to more of these great reviews! I'm gonna check into this section every day.

RangerZero
06-23-2009, 12:00 AM
LOL I quite never come around here but now this thread might just make me do it ;)

.

robotiod
06-23-2009, 01:48 PM
well done again lone
i know that its very hard
to talk in haiku


I'm getting pretty good at this myself

AAAlone
07-02-2009, 05:48 PM
Hi all,
You've not been abandoned, I've just been very very busy lately. So busy in fact that I've only got one haiku to add today. With any luck I'll be back in full form next week. For now...

The Great Escape from Alcatraz, by AceStryker

I always knew it!
Mutant Crocs in the sewers!
A great first level

Yarbone
07-02-2009, 06:06 PM
haha... i love this!

are you gonna add this one to the OP?.. that would make it easier for us to find it :)

.... wanna review my level solidplace? :3

RickRock_777
07-04-2009, 05:54 AM
OK AAAlone. We'll forgive you this time. But keep in mind you've got us "Hooked On Haiku" (a supplementary lesson of the "Hooked On Phonics" series), so please keep them coming.:)

Rick

AAAlone
07-14-2009, 07:20 PM
Hi all. I'm finally back from vacation and getting on top of work issues. I've even manged to squeeze in some LBP and bake up a new batch of haiku (careful they're still hot!). I have a bit more travel coming up so may be spotting over the next month, but there are always more user generated levels, so there will always be more haiku.

>>note: I'm editing the initial post to include all new haiku<<

Tiger Woods Mini-Golf by CuzFeeshe

Oops! Missed the windmill.
Dang! That sphinx is hard to hit!
Best golf game out there.


Chromastone Chronicles Parts 1-4 by Morgana25

I am the “hemmed hero”
who recovered all four stones!
Would that there were more.


The Mental Institution Part 1 by Ygg_Barasil

While it may be true
that it’s sad sackboy went nutz
this dream is worth it.


HyperSphere by MrsSpookyBuz

So crisply designed
And so tightly constructed
Oh! Geometry!


Light by Coxy224

It’s merely a test.
Only a minute or two.
But what a minute!

CCubbage
07-16-2009, 06:55 PM
Man, it must be tricky trying to get these things to fit into 17 syllables. I'm impressed.

NinjaMicWZ
07-16-2009, 08:00 PM
I just noticed this thread... I like it. MOR HAIKU...

If only I could get away with feedback this short in the showcase thread :D

So who's going to start doing audio rap reviews?

CCubbage
07-16-2009, 08:04 PM
You are! NinjaMic-Mic-Mic-Mic-WZZZZZZ! (imagine record scratching sounds during the "Mic" parts)

Coxy224
07-20-2009, 07:58 PM
Genius cub, I can't wait for your review thread!

And wow, thanks for reviewing my level AAAlone - very kind..... syllables!

AAAlone
07-24-2009, 05:16 PM
So here's my problem. While I'm at the office (and the boss isn't looking) I jot down a few levels that I'll play at home once the kids are asleep (I try to keep a running list). But I forget to bring the note home and don't get to it. Then I finally take the list home, and play... jot down some notes for my haiku review and then I forget to bring the note to work so I can publish the reviews (again while the boss isn't looking). I suppose I should just log on and post from home, but... well I'm a complicated guy. In any case I finally completed a the circle for a few more haiku. Enjoy!

The Tribe by Phife211

So enjoyable!
Subterranean puzzles
and a cool end boss.


Zilla's Neighborhood 2 by Godzillionaire

Game play is okay,
but the atmosphere is great!
very spooky woods.


Lone Ninja (series 1-4) by Coyote_blue

Hiyaaa! Ya! Take that!
Grappling hook and katana!
I am a ninja!


Robot Town 2 by Jump_Button

10 LOAD 'Robot Town'
20 EXECUTE 'Have Fun'
30 GOTO 10



Uh oh! Here comes the boss! I'd better get back to work!

CCubbage
07-27-2009, 01:31 AM
Another great list! Problem, though... I tried entering the "Robot Town 2" code, but realized I don't have my version of DOS with gwbasic, so it doesn't work. The .NET framework Visual Basic doesn't contain the keyword "Goto" anymore.

Well, guess I'll have to "Have Fun" some other night....

Mrgenji
07-27-2009, 03:13 PM
Haha some great stuff - keep it up mate ^^

Xenifus
07-27-2009, 08:34 PM
Everyone, look here
It's not on topic
It's a game haiku!

http://img198.imageshack.us/img198/387/mariorpghaiku.png

Bowser in his stress
Anyone remember this?
Twas before Smithy.

AAAlone
08-31-2009, 07:52 PM
Just a quick post to demonstrat that I'm still alive. Have been avoiding LBP lately because I'm completely blocked in creation of Moving Parts 2, and can't stand to see it stagnating. May be over the hump now... hopefully...

Anyway, I've got one new haiku today (added to first post as well).

Royal Love Letter (pts 1 & 2) by Luke/Mammett-box

Neither poison gas
nor a slithering snake boss
will stop this postman

AAAlone
09-04-2009, 08:33 PM
Sorry for double post...

Fresh Haiku for the hopper--

The Miracle of Life By Poms

Ah, reproduction!
Neither as cute nor icky
As this great level.


Tribal Ruins by jackofcourse

Who’s added one more
Five-star level to the game?
Why Jack, Of course!


Ancient Land of Dinosaurs by Art_of_Tyler

Deep in the jungle
Amidst some great dinosaurs
I found all the eggs!

CCubbage
09-04-2009, 08:40 PM
Awesome list once again!