View Full Version : Achil Stories! (Wanna Help?)

Ninja Crabby
08-17-2010, 01:15 AM
Welcome to Achil Stories! Achil Stories is about a small boy of an odd, mystical race on Earth, who finds a mystic portal in an old tree, growing on a small island in a pond in the forest. He and his pet bird, (a cedar waxwing, to be exact,) Summer, swim and fly over to the island. Summer goes to land on the tree, when she falls through the branch, into seemingly thin air! You follow her into the tree, or more properly, into to the science-fiction fantasy world of Achil! The plot has not been very developed yet, but the land is half medieval fantasy, half techno steampunk. You find Summer back early on, aand she follows you through the rest of your journey. You meet a crotchety old wizard, or someone of that sort, and they offer to take you home, but the crotchety side says they'll only let you if you defeat the evil dictator that rules the land:....MotorMouth. MotorMouth is a terrible and sadistic man, who came just as you had, through the tree. After a few years however, the once free and peaceful land was consumed by his taint. Many opposed him, and many failed, but one man, who also came through the tree, came and nearly destroyed MotorMouth. This was not his name then, but none dare speak it. The hero cleaved of most of MotorMouth's appendages, Including the upper part of his head, but his healer and mechanics managed to keep him alive long enough to replace his flesh with machines, powered by steam. Upon his awake, he donned the name Motormouth, and has never been opposed since. As for the hero, he was thrown into the DeepHart, the cruelest and most productive incarceration facility that has ever been, considering it's at the bottom of the sea. The man says Achil needs your help. Find the hero, aquire a following, liberate Achil, and defeat MotorMouth!

Hope you enjoy it so far! I'll post some concepts and maybe a poll for the protagonist tomorrow! Hope you all enjoy, and post your ideas for stuff, or if you want to help build!

08-17-2010, 09:39 AM
O.O Another ingenious idea for LBP2? lol I'm going to have alot to play :) Great job on the story btw

Ninja Crabby
08-17-2010, 08:02 PM
Heya guys! I built some possible costumes for the protagonist! Sneak a look...

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs399.snc4/46271_145516878802511_100000325981167_287953_61403 24_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs385.snc4/44852_145516888802510_100000325981167_287954_56678 51_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs385.snc4/44852_145516892135843_100000325981167_287955_45737 59_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs365.snc4/44852_145516895469176_100000325981167_287956_73017 92_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash2/hs185.ash2/44852_145516905469175_100000325981167_287959_69915 70_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash2/hs185.ash2/44852_145516908802508_100000325981167_287960_91315 7_n.jpg

Hope you enjoy! Also, here's some ideas for enemies!

MotorMouth Minion!
http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs365.snc4/44852_145516898802509_100000325981167_287957_52305 72_n.jpg
This design might be subject to change.

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs385.snc4/44852_145516902135842_100000325981167_287958_35522 96_n.jpg
Reverse Axe ftw! What do you expect, they're stupid Orks!

Remember to ask if you want in, I will probably start around Feb 2011!

EDIT:None of these are close to final. I want to finish story mode and get most costumes before i even think about this.

08-17-2010, 09:31 PM
Diggin #2,3 and 4 the most but I like all of the possible protag costumes (except #5, not so much >_> strictly my opinion though:) Nice ork too :P

Ninja Crabby
08-18-2010, 12:35 AM
Ok peeps! Time for a wee bit of work on your part. What do you think your party members should be like? I have 3 ideas i know I'm going to put in. Here they are.

Simon and Sampson Stormer: 2 African American blacksmiths that you find early on. Their sister, Yvette, was taken away by MotorMouth to be a slave. (NO RACISM INTENDED) They decide to join you to find their sister.

Raggamuff: There is a race of hyper, fluffy ewok creatures in this world, called Utiniis. One such Utinii, named Ragamuff, is a social outcast in his society, solely on his voice and personality. While all the other Utinii run and play and SCREAM AT THE TOP OF THEIR LUNGS, Ragamuff would rather read a book by firelight with a pipe and adorable little glasses. And his voice, what's worse, sounds just like Sean Connery's! All the other Utinii ridicule him, so he figures it would be nice to get away from all the other Utinii. He never really liked being ruled by a dictator anyway.

Hope you like these ideas, feel free to post your own! Bye!

08-18-2010, 12:54 AM
This sounds awesome. I really look forward to it!

Ninja Crabby
08-18-2010, 02:28 AM

Ok, so while I was taking my adorable puppy for a walk, I thought about how the levels would go together, and how you would get around. I decided that that each "level" will be a province of Achil. The map is a top-down area, and once you reach a place, you can press O to go there. You are marked my a little icon moving around the map. Not sure what it will be like. There will be towns, "dungeons" and little areas in between that you can visit. To prcoeed onto the next province, you must do a couple of things in the area you are in, i.e, get the party member, fight through the dungeon, talk to this person or that person, stuff like that.

Well, I had to post before I forgot, so enjoy!

Also, keep posting ideas for party members, try to include a race, name and backstory, (picture optional) and they might pop in!

Ninja Crabby
08-19-2010, 12:34 AM
We have a lock for the protagonist! His name is to be Scrap, unless I change my mind!

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash2/hs149.ash2/40810_145812998772899_100000325981167_289399_63937 20_n.jpg

I liked this one best, and I think it fits the idea of the character I wanted nicely!

Also, I have some pics of the first few party members!

Samson Stormer:
http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash2/hs183.ash2/44665_145813028772896_100000325981167_289404_75003 74_n.jpg

Simon Stormer:
http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs383.snc4/44665_145813025439563_100000325981167_289403_37741 78_n.jpg

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs383.snc4/44665_145813022106230_100000325981167_289402_27887 91_n.jpg

Also, more enemies yaaaay!

http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs363.snc4/44665_145813015439564_100000325981167_289400_25544 26_n.jpg

Clump Monsters!
http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs383.snc4/44665_145813018772897_100000325981167_289401_50157 56_n.jpg

This thread is mostly going to be for characters, I'll make an update thread about the actual game! Hope you enjoy these costumes!