View Full Version : A Writing Preview

10-17-2010, 02:05 AM
It's been awhile since I was here. MAybe, 3 months. Ah Well, The Collecter Avenged became too much of a hassle to write anyways.

I found something decent to write about.

Here's a preview:

White walls surround me.

This was no accident. This place, it is a prison.

There's no means of escape from this prison. Not even Blacktooth could escape.

They say I'm insane. Thus the name of this prison, with white walls closing in on me.

They call it the Insanity Asylum. I don't see how being insane deserves you getting locked up.

But then, where's the fun in being free. You have not a care in the world. Not here, you don't. Escape is legendary. Non one has accomplished it. But then again, you are in a box, padded walls, and white flashes. The door is locked, with about three doors, five keys, and three DNA checks. There are no windows, and no hope.

The place, you'd expect it to be dreary and sad. It's full of insane laughter. There's always the atmosphere. It's there. Everyone is somehow sad. Sorrows, lives lost, divorce, kids. There's always something. No one came here on their own, but we all love this place to death. It is our favourite place to be. No doubt about that.

Of course, if the doors were left open for even a second, we'd be out of here in a heartbeat.

A flash of lightning.

A roll of thunder.

We all see this as an entertaining prison, but we don't need to be here. The escape itself would be an insane flash of light.

But then again, there is a different story to each of us here.

Me? My name isn't important. Neither is how I got here. I am here of my own accord, and I wouldn't have it any other way.

But I need to leave this place. I have duties elsewhere in the world.

Now, I can escape, but it will take a plot. An evil mind.

Now my escape, oh, it will be story to tell among generations.

I do have a question. How can I seperate chapters and whatnot? I want my original post to be something along this format (http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/showthread.php?28625-THE-ULTIMATE-DESTINY-OF-SACKBOY-WHO-IS-PROTAGONIST-(A-Funny-Tale-of-Bad-Grammar))

10-17-2010, 09:59 AM
very nice.
it seem mildly morbid...
i look forward to the rest.

10-17-2010, 06:09 PM
It's slightly morbid in the beginning, talking about why they're there in their cells, but no blood, guts, and gore morbidity. The word murder is brought up once or twice. what's cool is that the escape plan is pure evil... Unexpected turns, twists, etc.

It's fun to write about insane people. It gives a unique point of view. The warden is a jerk, the guards are practically stone walls. The security is tight, and only one plan can escape that. I found it funny, writing chapters 20-30, The Escape. The ten or so chapters afterward are more of a humsn vs nature, Hatchet-type thing, and chapters 40-50 will be a fun little aftermath. It will be enjoyable to read, hopefully. My only question is how to categorize chapters, like this (http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/showthread.php?28625-THE-ULTIMATE-DESTINY-OF-SACKBOY-WHO-IS-PROTAGONIST-(A-Funny-Tale-of-Bad-Grammar)).