LBPC: The Villain

[RockSauron]

INDEX
PROLOGUE (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_27hkcdvscr)
CHAPTER 1 (https://docs.google.com/Doc?tab=publish&docid=ds3929t_28cm92qj3f&hl=en)
CHAPTER 2 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_30grnhtwdt)
CHAPTER 3 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_31czt8wfcs)
CHAPTER 4 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_32dbdcfbfj)
CHAPTER 5 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_34pgbn7m52)
CHAPTER 6 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_38t5jqwsd2)
CHAPTER 7 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_40c28dgqjx)
CHAPTER 8 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_41hdvgpwgg)
CHAPTER 9 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_42c4j8wzqc)
CHAPTER 10 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_43q3stjngz)
CHAPTER 11 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_44cjj5x6hj)
CHAPTER 12 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_45f4nsg4c2)
CHAPTER 13 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_46hd6fcxgf)
CHAPTER 14 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_47gtnwsngc)
CHAPTER 15 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_48ggh546dh)
CHAPTER 16 (http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ds3929t_50dnkgrncp)

[Bear]

Ah, I just read that. It seems pretty cool so far, I mean there wasn't much added but I like the mystery and faint humour.

[Hamsalad]

pretty good cliff hanger I just read itz! did you check out my newest chapter too?

[Zommy]

nice... the ... is for emphasis on how bored i am because i haz nothing to do anymore... guess ill go watch some boring cartoons... lolz... there happy.. im tired...

[qrtda235566]

SO...MANY...STORY THREADS!!!


*brain explodes*

WAIT NEVERMIND YOU READ NOTHING!

[RockSauron]

Alrighty, Chapter 1 is up. As you may be able to see, this won't be as humorous... tell me what you think of it so far, and blah blah blah.

[Code1337]

I'm sorry... but I found that hilarious.

[RockSauron]

I'm sorry... but I found that hilarious.

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay... wait in good way or bad way? :confused:

[Code1337]

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay... wait in good way or bad way? :confused:
A good way, I love all the old references.

[Boomy]

I got a few of those references :p pretty cool story so far. :)

(Marino drunken pirate, ha!)

[ryryryan]

Haha i loved it. Since i've been here since even before 'CC's time', i get everything. MOAR :D Include Gia somehow xD

[Whalio Cappuccino]

Not as funny. But still as good, can't wait for Chapter 2, and 3, and 4, and 5, and 6, and 7, and 8.

Why did I stop at 8?


The world will never know...

[Don Vhalt]

Really good so far. I joined around the same time as rock so I got all the refrences. There isn't as much humor but it's still really funny. So Yeah great so far.

[RockSauron]

Chapter 2 is now OPEN FOR BUSINESS!

[Whalio Cappuccino]

Lawl I like how me and Awesomemans are like, some sort of... I don't know what they call it but yeah.

I'm so cool, how I came out of the ground and such.


And wow two people already dead, this is getting pretty interesting.

[RAINFIRE]

hey another great story... goin to check out the others bug good job on this on so far

Cheers!

[lk9988]

Nice story. I still found it quite funny even though it's designed not to be funny (that isn't a bad thing!:)). I wonder what will happen next...:confused:

[RockSauron]

I have taken the liberty of adding Chapter 3 to this =O

[dawesbr]

This. Is. AWESOME!

I feel guilty that I'm such a new member...

[Hamsalad]

naw you shouldn't even more veteran members arn't in it.

[RockSauron]

naw you shouldn't even more veteran members arn't in it.

He means that my story may give the impression that I think newer members "ruined" LBPC... at least I think that's what's going on.

Anyway, they didn't ruin LBPC. This is kinda just a... eulogy, to say. Well, most old people here have lost interest, have been banned, or just don't come here that often. Really, the only two old users that aren't mods that I can think of who are really active still are me and Whaaaaale O_o.

So, yeah. Don't feel bad. this is just me trying to express the changes that have occurred in LBPC over the past few months recently, and a bit of yearning for the days of old... or something similar.

[Astrosimi]

How's that cup of blood taste Dark Lord?


Anyways, this is getting to be good. Can't wait till 4.

[Code1337]

He means that my story may give the impression that I think newer members "ruined" LBPC... at least I think that's what's going on.

Anyway, they didn't ruin LBPC. This is kinda just a... eulogy, to say. Well, most old people here have lost interest, have been banned, or just don't come here that often. Really, the only two old users that aren't mods that I can think of who are really active still are me and Whaaaaale O_o.

So, yeah. Don't feel bad. this is just me trying to express the changes that have occurred in LBPC over the past few months recently, and a bit of yearning for the days of old... or something similar.
LBPC has changed a lot since I resigned from modship. I feel like a n00b, and the fact that I don't play lbp at all doesn't help. >_<

[RockSauron]

Chapter 4 has been RELEASED!

[Astrosimi]

Heheh, headshot. I liked the comment about Drunkmiffy probably being in a bar.

[RockSauron]

FINE! I see how it is >_<

Yeah, you all just go to the ZOMBIEZ! :/

... Meyep.

[moleynator]

Its just like CSI, except I know whats going on and I enjoy it. XD

[RockSauron]

Its just like CSI, except I know whats going on and I enjoy it. XD

Well that's good.

...

*awkward silence*

[Boomy]

Haha I liked the DrunkMiffy reference in the last chapter :p

[dawesbr]

:D 5* and a heart on the new chapter!

[TheArmedReaper]

Wow. That was awesome! I loved the way how you coilided virtuality and reality. Loved it man!

[RockSauron]

Well, thanks for the support guys. Chapter 5 is up. not as important, just wanted to get some more people in there before switching back to Code.

[TheArmedReaper]

T'was good.
:D

[Code1337]

Aww man... now I miss the good ole days with Stix.

[RockSauron]

Aww man... now I miss the good ole days with Stix.

I know :(. I miss our epic wars...

[Don Vhalt]

Good chapter. Makes me wish we had the good old days on here. Briliant community...... All the cool members who have left still here...... Epic lulz.....The original spam can.... Etc. Etc.

Yours and stix battle thread was funny.

[TheArmedReaper]

I know :(. I miss our epic wars...
You can always pick wars with some local noobs... That can be quite entertaining.
:(

[Astrosimi]

You can always pick wars with some local noobs... That can be quite entertaining.
:(

Nah, unfortunately those are against the rules.

Sort of like spamming in the spam can :p

[RockSauron]

Chapter 6 has been added!

[TheArmedReaper]

And it is a great addition to the story so far! Is that the end?! Is Code perma dead, or is he a survivor?! OMG I CAN'T LIVE WITHOUT KNOWING IF IT'S THE END OF THE MYSTERY!
*Reaps self*

[Code1337]

I'm... dead. ;-;

[RockSauron]

MYbe maybe not ;)

[Stix489]

Aww man... now I miss the good ole days with Stix.

Maybe this isn't the thread to state this buuuuut, here goes:

I left here for a few reasons...the main one is SCHOOL. I did not leave here because I didn't like LBP, because well, I LOVE LBP. School has been taking up almost 80% of my time, so I had to cut back on the internet a bit.

I'm on my holidays now, and I hope to be back as an active member (or a spamming member, according to oldage). :D

I miss the good ol' days too man, I really do! :)

[Astrosimi]

Wow. Short chapters with cliffhangers.... that's an awesome form of writing. It's just like Lost, except with LBP mingled with a touch of Watchmen :p

[Don Vhalt]

Maybe this isn't the thread to state this buuuuut, here goes:

I left here for a few reasons...the main one is SCHOOL. I did not leave here because I didn't like LBP, because well, I LOVE LBP. School has been taking up almost 80% of my time, so I had to cut back on the internet a bit.

I'm on my holidays now, and I hope to be back as an active member (or a spamming member, according to oldage). :D

I miss the good ol' days too man, I really do! :)

Hello Stix. Good to see you back :)

And good chapter.

[Stix489]

Hello Stix. Good to see you back :)

And good chapter.

Glad to be back, dude.

And thanks for sticking up for me against oldage, I really appreciate it. :)

[Lil-Pingin]

great job so far on the story, I have enjoyed reading all the chapters so far, keep up the good work....:):)

[TheArmedReaper]

Glad to be back, dude.

And thanks for sticking up for me against oldage, I really appreciate it. :)
Long time no see ay...
Hi.
:)

[Stix489]

long time no see ay...
Hi.
:)

hai!

:)

[TheArmedReaper]

RockSauron! I can't wait any longer! Please write more!!!
Dx

[dawesbr]

The new chapter is ridiculous in its awesome level. I hope it's just that the rain is too loud (referring to the closing line).

[Bear]

This is actually VERY good, I was reading through it when silenced. Nice job, Rock.

[RockSauron]

I have unleashed Chapter 7 upon the world. OH THE HORROR!

[dawesbr]

Love the new chapter, spesh the courtroom and the addition of Killian. 3 more awesome points for you, my good sir!

[Killian]

Just read the entire thing. Funny stuff. Keep it up! :)

[RockSauron]

... Ya know... no one has even THOUGHT about the identity of the Vet killer...

Come on, I want people to discuss WHO IT COULD BE :O

[Killian]

I'll tell you who it is - LBP!

[Bear]

It's obvious. The killer is... Stuff

Oh and clever use of facepalms. :O

[Burrich]

HAHA that was brilliant man. I loved it. Code reminds me of Rorschach from Watchmen... and I guess Clive Owen's character from Sin City.

[RockSauron]

HAHA that was brilliant man. I loved it. Code reminds me of Rorschach from Watchmen... and I guess Clive Owen's character from Sin City.

Well, it should remind you of Rorshach, seeing as how he pretty much IS Rorshach...

... Maybe I should add a Dr. Manhatten character for no real reason :/

[dawesbr]

Vet is LBP, right?

[Astrosimi]

... Maybe I should add a Dr. Manhatten character for no real reason :/

(Must... Resist... Urge....)


Cough, cough.

[RockSauron]

I have unleashed yet ANOTHER piece of AWESOME to this cold, desolate land.

[Killian]

Nail-biting stuff! I love how it's tied in with LBP as well as LBPC - "Score bubbles". :p

[dawesbr]

Great stuff! That seemed so like stix from the small impression I've had from him. Loved Whaaale, loved Stix, loved it all!

[TheArmedReaper]

xD
Stix broke out the wrong guy!
You should publish this it's so awesome..

[Code1337]

/facepalm

Good old Stix.

[Stix489]

=D =D =D

Proud to be of service. :)

[RockSauron]

Yes, Stix, you are... "special" XD

anywho, CHAPTER 9 IS UP! ... bit darker, but yeah.

[Code1337]

I just re-read the story.

Seriously Rock...? Is that your vet killer?

[Astrosimi]

:/
I hate Google.
If someone coul send me the story in a PM, I'd be very thankful.
As in, XP thankful.



We're sorry...
... but your query looks similar to automated requests from a computer virus or spyware application. To protect our users, we can't process your request right now.

[dawesbr]

I've PMed it to you (god that took a while. 5000 character limit, and 2 chapters is 5,800 characters. In case you want to know, the whole think so far is 25k.

And no need for the XP.

[Astrosimi]

Thank you :D I only needed the last chapter though :p Maybe I should have said that. My bad.

But either way you still gain XP

[RockSauron]

... The plot thickens in Chapter 10 :/

... Yeah >_> ... that means chapter 10 is up, FYI.

[dawesbr]

Wicked new addition. I see you're not afraid to make yourself AWESOME!

You repeated "assured his audience" at the start. Just saying. Don't kill me, oh Colonel Mr Dr Rock, PhD, sir.

[TheArmedReaper]

Great!
Absolutely loved it..
:)

[RockSauron]

Eh... I think the whole "Peanut" and "The Forsaken" thing just ruin the story, so I'm taking chapter 10 of the menu >_>.

[TheArmedReaper]

Well come up with something new now Rock! I can't wait till you next chapter...
=D

[RockSauron]

Made Chapter 10!

... also think I may "borrow" from Cog, and try to have some fan system or whatever :/ HERE I GO :O

[dawesbr]

Methinks me knows the killer, though it doesn't make much sense :P

[RockSauron]

Methinks me knows the killer, though it doesn't make much sense :P

who do you think? Send me a pm :p

[TheArmedReaper]

Scythe pulled his scythe out and pointed it at that... thing.

What's that supposed to mean?..
>.>
Lol. Yay! I'm famous.
:)
Btw, count me as a subscriber..

[dawesbr]

Hehe. Shame Scythe went back inactive again :(

Rock, thanks for reading my story, I added some more :P

[RockSauron]

MUHAHAHAHA! Chapter 11 :D

[dawesbr]

Read it. Very interesting...hmmm...hmmmmmmm...hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm m. Nope, I don't know who it is :P (Though I have a guess.)

Nice job though. Poor Awesomemans!

[RockSauron]

Read it. Very interesting...hmmm...hmmmmmmm...hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm m. Nope, I don't know who it is :P (Though I have a guess.)

Nice job though. Poor Awesomemans!

Pm me your guess then :)

[qrtda235566]

It could be....Marino? Clank? Hm....

Why'd you kill meh? :(

[RockSauron]

It could be....Marino? Clank? Hm....

Why'd you kill meh? :(

To wipe you off the suspect list :)

[qrtda235566]

No, it's definitely lbp or CC! :p

[TheArmedReaper]

Ok, so which main characters aren't dead?..
Lol.
You really create the sense of mystery. And it was just tragic that Awesomemans died before he could name the killer. Shame.
:)

[dawesbr]

Oh, you subscribe now? Add me :P

[Bear]

Considering I check to see if there's a new chapter frequently, I shall subscribe. :O

[qrtda235566]

I xubckr1be 2 pl0x!

[lk9988]

One word:
Awesomness.

Seriously though, this is a GREAT mystery story and I'm left wondering just WHO the killer could be.

Anyways could I subscribe please?

[dawesbr]

This story has so much intrigue! It's like a proper murder mystery! how many chapters left before the true identity is revealed?

[RockSauron]

This story has so much intrigue! It's like a proper murder mystery! how many chapters left before the true identity is revealed?

I don't know! :O

[dawesbr]

Ah, going along with the flow, are we ;P. You'd better know who the killer is, though.

[RockSauron]

Ah, going along with the flow, are we ;P. You'd better know who the killer is, though.

Of course I do >_>.

And only I do! I haven't told anyone :eek:

[Code1337]

K, so it can't be Awesomemans now... and Rocksauron would have to know this person...

idk

[RockSauron]

K, so it can't be Awesomemans now... and Rocksauron would have to know this person...

idk

What? nothing about your supposed suicide? :/

[dawesbr]

Code doesn't care about that, he just is focusing on the fact that you have to know this person!

Wait, that was obvious. How else could Rock have an identity for the killer, if he's never even met him!

[Code1337]

What? nothing about your supposed suicide? :/
I don't really care about that, but it may provide a clue. It seems that the killer doesn't even need to kill the people directly. So... I'm stumped.

Code doesn't care about that, he just is focusing on the fact that you have to know this person!

Wait, that was obvious. How else could Rock have an identity for the killer, if he's never even met him!
He would obviously have to have known him well. :/

[RockSauron]

Chapter 12!

The web gets more tangled!

[Code1337]

This should be interesting... o.O

[TheArmedReaper]

Excuse me? Scythe was beating me? You've got it all wrong Rock...
Lol.
I suppose Code's been banned- or something?

[Code1337]

Excuse me? Scythe was beating me? You've got it all wrong Rock...
Lol.
I suppose Code's been banned- or something?
I suicided, so that put me in ban-world.

[qrtda235566]

Rock, if you bring Code back to life and not me, I swear to god I'll kill ya! :mad:

[Bear]

Haha, that one was awesome.

I'm afraid I'll have to wait until tomorrow to review this, purely because I have lots of stuff to do at the moment.

[dawesbr]

Nice chapter. OMG did you just reveal the identity of the killer? Or was it just ban-land? Nice chapter, by the way. Oh, and you missed off an "-ed" on the last word :P

[Code1337]

Nice chapter. OMG did you just reveal the identity of the killer? Or was it just ban-land? Nice chapter, by the way. Oh, and you missed off an "-ed" on the last word :P
No, it's just ban land. Marino is a former mod who got banned after he went insane. Should be REAL interesting because he used to be a good friend of mine.

[Bear]

‘LPBC: The Villain’ is one of the most amusing stories on the forum, and the thing is; it’s not specifically supposed to be. It’s somewhat of a reflection from the entire duration of LBPCentral’s life span. Usually, the deaths in this story correspond to members leaving the site, which is carried out by a vet killer shooting people down. I adore this story, so much so that I have subscribed. However, I’ve tried to prevent myself, in this review, from simply evaluating the plot and instead looking over the whole thing.

The prologue takes place at the near beginning of LBPC, and is amazingly hooking. It gave me reason to read on instantly, which could be considered one of the most important things in a story. The prologue is rather short, just like the other chapters.

The structure isn’t easily recognisable; it is unique in a sense. I feel that it could be edited slightly by editing smaller things such as having ‘Sigh’ in speech marks, which is more a motion than dialogue. I could down point this structure furthermore but I feel it should be let off due to its overall consistency.
At the end of pretty much every chapter in ‘The Villain’, it is left on a question that you ask to yourself, one that has not been answered thus far. Just who is the Vet Killer? I, personally, don’t have the slightest clue. Sometimes, I feel the suspense and mystery could’ve been written better, with possible phrases similar to the ending of the prologue always being rather befitting of most chapters.

Overall Review:

This story is simply a stunning and rather fun read, with a few lovable characters fitted in there. My final overlook of this story brings me to the rating:
8.5/10

[lk9988]

Another nice chapter. So I'm guessing Code woke up in the land of the banned? Anyways the suspense builds up more every chapter.

[RockSauron]

Well, maybe i'll have to change Code's location since I like your ideas better >_>

Anyway, I FINALLY FIGURED OUT THE ENDING! I've known who the vet killer is (me and one other person who will be a secret :eek:), but never figured out how exactly this would all work out... but I did it a few minutes ago! Yay me!

[RockSauron]

Chapter 13 is up... Only two chapters left... WHO IS THE VET KILLER... READ!

also, with only two more chapters, I eliminated you subscribers. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

[dawesbr]

You sneaky Evil Lord, you! Totally had me going until the end then. No idea now.

[Code1337]

Well I can say I feel pretty involved in this story.

[TheArmedReaper]

Wait, so CC isn't the vet killer? Then who the hell is?!
Dx

[Bear]

I doubt my prediction of 'Stuff' is still correct. :O

[dawesbr]

It's not Serbius, is it. The ultimate vet, who is also lint. The worst of both worlds xD

[Morgana25]

lol - superstar doll status.... I can live with that.

[RockSauron]

The killer may or may not be revealed in the next chapter- your call :D.

[RockSauron]

Chapter 14... is here.

Find out who the vet killer is... NOW.

[Code1337]

WOW... just WOW.

[Bear]

OH MAH FREAKING GOD, IT'S LIL PINGIN!o

[dawesbr]

Was that a reference to the message she left when she added new members to her friends list?

Wow what a chapter...

[Bear]

Was that a reference to the message she left when she added new members to her friends list?

I believe so. xD

[Code1337]

OH MAH FREAKING GOD, IT'S LIL PINGIN!o

Your avatar along with that post made me laugh, btw.

[QuozL]

Meh, I've been dead since chapter 6,

carefactor = 0

;)

Cheers QuozL

[Bear]

Your avatar along with that post made me laugh, btw.

Haha, that's pretty ironic actually.
Perhaps I should make all of my posts dramatic from now on...

[Astrosimi]

OMYGOD!

It all snapped when I saw the message!

I remember it clearly!

How does that work out though? What motive would she have for her actions?


EDIT for those who don't get it and/or have not opened Ghost's spoiler:
http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/converse.php?u=3086&u2=2834

[dawesbr]

How did it "snap" exactly? WTH was with all the peanuts, then?

[RockSauron]

all may be revealed soon... :O

... hint, though. Think about what staff member HASN'T been killed yet... ;)

[Bear]

lbp? Wait, did supersickie die? I can't remember. >_>

[RockSauron]

lbp? Wait, did supersickie die? I can't remember. >_>

... lbp was killed by CC, supersickie was poisoned by Yarbone...

... Geez, didn't think it would be THIS hard to put the pieces together >_>. Who ELSE isn't dead, AND has admin access? =_=

[Bear]

OMFG...

EvilTikiGod. :O



EDIT: ****, that looks good with my avatar too. xD

[dawesbr]

I actually worked out ETG when I discovered it was LP. Aren't they, like, married or something?

[Yarbone]

..uhm... i haven't read the story yet... because i'm really lazy at reading stuff, but... am I actually in this story?

Just wanna know :3

[dawesbr]

Yes you are Yarbone. You should read it - you'll be quite surprised what happens in around chapter 4/5... :P

[Sackdragon]

I actually worked out ETG when I discovered it was LP. Aren't they, like, married or something?

Yes, I think they are.

[RockSauron]

Yes, they are.

No they're not =_=

They aren't married, or even engaged. They just are boyfriend and girlfriend and live together... or something :/

Anyway... Yes, Yarbone... You... TRAITOR! :mad:

[qrtda235566]

OMFG IT'S MOUSE ZOMG!

wowzers.

[Sackdragon]

They aren't married, or even engaged. They just are boyfriend and girlfriend and live together... or something :/
Oh, sorry. I was under the impression that they were >_>

[Lil-Pingin]

The story is great Rock had to do a lot of catch up reading today and was really impressed. And to all EvilTikiGod and I are just boyfriend and girlfriend who live together. We have been with each other for 4 years feels like we are married at times...lol. Anyways, keep up the great work on the story Rock look forward to reading many more good chapters. And thanks for the spectacular roll it fits me well, was quiet surprised when I found out I was in the story with such a big role.....;);)

[EvilTikiGod]

hahaha "just stopping by to say hi"

[Lil-Pingin]

HaHaHa....real cute Tiki. Wonders if I will get to kill you as well in the story and if so how? That would be kinda cool....lol;)

[lk9988]

Nice chapter. The end of the chapter is making me want more, and QUICKLY!

[RockSauron]

I lied- there will be 16 chapters.

chapter 15 is up, which means obne more till the exciting conclusion!

[Lil-Pingin]

HeHeHe I chuckle as I have to say very good chapter. Glad there will be at least one more to your FANTASTIC story. Gotta say really love the role you gave me and also how you incorporated EvilTikiGod into it. I am ready for chapter 16 right now...lol!

[lk9988]

That was an epic chapter. Maybe the best so far. I'm sure the conclusion will be even more exciting!

[Bear]

Loved that chapter. The weird thing is, your VM was pretty much the reason for me to come to this thread for a potential new chapter.

O_O

[RockSauron]

I have released the final chapter! Finish the glory NOW!

[Bear]

LBPC: The Villain = WIN.

You should seriously make a sequel somehow in the future. :O

[qrtda235566]

That ending...confused me. Oh, and by the way, I know I hated how Lil Pingin was the Vet Killer, but you wrapped in up in such a nice way that now I like it. :p

[RockSauron]

That ending...confused me. Oh, and by the way, I know I hated how Lil Pingin was the Vet Killer, but you wrapped in up in such a nice way that now I like it. :p

... I caused Code to explode because I wanted to. What's not to get? :/

[qrtda235566]

Where was he going, Pokemon world?

[RockSauron]

Where was he going, Pokemon world?

no, he was leaving LBPC for another forum. then I killed him.

[Code1337]

*dies* Nice ending rock.

[TheArmedReaper]

You should make a sequal following these events in the LBPC world. It will be awesome.
:)

[RockSauron]

um... what could a sequel be, though? :/

I could make another LBPC related thing, but a sequel? Not so much.

[Bear]

The Rise of the Lint. xD

I'm not sure if a sequel is possible, with practically everyone being dead and all. You should totally make a new LBPC one. :O

[RockSauron]

The Rise of the Lint. xD

I'm not sure if a sequel is possible, with practically everyone being dead and all. You should totally make a new LBPC one. :O

first I need a basic story idea for one >_>

[Bear]

Well, I have no ideas. xD

[RockSauron]

Well, I have no ideas. xD

Too late, I already started a new one XD

[Bear]

I suck. D: xD

[Lil-Pingin]

Good story LMAO at me killing myself that was too funny.

[Astrosimi]

I laughed at the few final Watchmen reference, especially the fact that RockSauron went Dr.Manhattan on Code's butt. For no reason whatsoever.

And if Lil Pingin was to take a page from Ozzymandias, it should have been the one where he doesn't reveal his plan until 35 minutes after killing everyone.


Good job. Your writing skills are superb.

[RockSauron]

I laughed at the few final Watchmen reference, especially the fact that RockSauron went Dr.Manhattan on Code's butt. For no reason whatsoever.

And if Lil Pingin was to take a page from Ozzymandias, it should have been the one where he doesn't reveal his plan until 35 minutes after killing everyone.


Good job. Your writing skills are superb.

the problem with that is her plans were to kill all vets in one stroke, and since those two guys were vets, if she revealed it 35 minutes after the fact... they would have been dead for 35 minutes :/

[Astrosimi]

the problem with that is her plans were to kill all vets in one stroke, and since those two guys were vets, if she revealed it 35 minutes after the fact... they would have been dead for 35 minutes :/

We already discussed this, but stiil, just to reinstate.



I know she was goping to kill them all. I was kidding. But still, she didn't have to tell them anyways, she could have gone straight away with the plan.

And I would live anyways. Harhar.

[RockSauron]

We already discussed this, but stiil, just to reinstate.



I know she was goping to kill them all. I was kidding. But still, she didn't have to tell them anyways, she could have gone straight away with the plan.

And I would live anyways. Harhar.

But she had to do it at midnight! She was stalling them so there was no way they could do anything after she told them (defeat her, hack the computer, defeat eviltikigod in a minute?)

[ryryryan]

I'm not kidding Rock... you do have great writing skills! The basics are all there along with the story (given all the names making sense etc xD)... well done indeed friend. well done indeed.

EDIT: IMO... in chapter 13 Marino should of been surrounded by religion and God like figures for his hell xD would of been perfect mwahaha xD

[TheArmedReaper]

I'm not kidding Rock... you do have great writing skills! The basics are all there along with the story (given all the names making sense etc xD)... well done indeed friend. well done indeed.

EDIT: IMO... in chapter 13 Marino should of been surrounded by religion and God like figures for his hell xD would of been perfect mwahaha xD
xD Lol.
Good memories...
:)

[dawesbr]

HAhaahaha oh wow, what an ending! Hooray, I'm not considered a "spammer" (even though I have a ridiculous post count)