art critique and quick crash
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg I absolutely love the bamboo grove with the little falling orbs - very nice indeed!
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg Just at the end of the grove, you've got a really noticeable seam in the grass. As Luck would have it, you have a rock right next to it in the front layer that can be moved over to hide it.
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg The rock embedded in the ground just after the bridge - Same deal. A little mossy shaped thing to hide where the seam reaches all the way down, or even, extend the base of the tree next to it to look like a root. there are other instances of this, so I'll just say go through and check your seams. It really helps a level look smooth.
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg In the forest with the house, all the fine craft is hidden in gloom. You can set the mood with-out sacrificing visibility with darkness, time of day, and fog color. And also, some out-of-view colored lights set dim with higher radius. Your are the artist, here, so you should set the lighting. You can't depend on the player to put your level in the most flattering light.
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg The elevator: If some one goes too high and jumps down, they have to restart to see the rest and finish. My suggestion is to attach an invisible chain to the handle and the wall of the elevator, then connect it to a proximity switch on the bottom floor. That way, if some one is down-stairs, next to the shaft, the chain will pull the switch into the "down" position.
http://i612.photobucket.com/albums/t...wanbullets.jpg I like how you give the player a choice in collecting stickers, or not.
I didn't comment on the actual art in this critique because it's highly subjective. I loved it all and was super-impressed!
In return, could you checkout Gradient Studio Utility? It's one of my F4F levels, even though, it's not a level per se.
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I noticed you asking advice on F4F in another thread:
When you give feed-back, Try to say somthing a little more usefull than "yor lvl ROCKS!". Feel free to say that, if you want, but elaborate a little on why. I try to find at least one thing that could be improved in my opinion. I can be pretty long-winded, so my feed-back is not a great example.
hope that helps
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As for linking your thread:
this code (remove the asterisk) (*)
[*url=http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/showthread.php?p=265792#post265792]Unnamed Canvas[/url]
will yeald this:
Unnamed Canvas
the first part is the addres of your page, and the last part is what ever you want the person to see.
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also: here's a little page I found that is really helpful. shows all sorts of basic bbcode tricks:
BBCode tags reference
(some of them don't work on this site, but most do.)
hope this helps