The Case of the Missing Donut

[Dietomaha]

http://lbp.me/v/xe7hjp

This is my first level made exclusively in LBP 2, and I would welcome some feedback / criticism for it.

The 'story' (if you really want to call it that) is that your twin brother (or sister) lost his (or her) donut in the bookshelf, and it's your job to find it. But then when you find it, he (or she) keeps asking you to find more stuff!

So yeah, not really an A-game story, but I think it's somewhat funny in-game. Everything but the donut (which is a modified vehicle from a story level) is my own creation. Yes. Donut vehicle. I regret nothing.

Thank you very much for trying it out!

I will F4F as well.

[Dietomaha]

A few pictures:

[Leafy101]

This level is very original and fun! You did a great job, and there are only some small things that you should fix. First, in the beginning of the stage, if you go left and push your self against the book and then jump, you will go through a hole in the book and land on the floor, forced to restart. This isn't a big problem, it just kind of annoyed me. Secondly, I got crushed under the teacup after I went down the slide, and I had to restart from the last checkpoint. These aren't really big, but I would reccommend fixing them if you can. I really liked the level, and it was the perfect balance between hard and fun.
P.S. I gave it a happy face rating.

[Dietomaha]

Thank you very much for posting some feedback. I appreciate it.

I'm definitely aware of both of these problems, I just forgot to fix them when I went to publish. There were so many little things to fix and these slipped by me hehe. Anyways I'll fix both of those right away. Thanks!

Would love some more feedback! F4F and such!

[sManic]

Hey Dietomaha, as promised i played your level!
Gave it a review.

I enjoyed the level, it reminded me a lot of the story levels where you would do some platforming and then some vehicle obstacles and then a bit more platforming, really well structured.

There were a few problems i found, which were quite frustrating.
The part after you ride the vehicle where you have to swing on the 4 sponges that are electric, i found this near to impossible. Either my skill with a grappling hook isn't very good or this was just very difficult. After doing it i was quite surprised i'd managed to do it.
Then the bit immediately after, where you climb to get the tea i thought felt a bit rushed, up untill these two obstacles the game was perfect.
But of course bad feedback always makes it sound bad, but i did really enjoy your level!
I look forward to future publishes and might even go check out your other levels now.

[Dietomaha]

Thank you sir

The part you are referring to with the electric sponges is indeed intentionally difficult, that's why I put the infinite checkpoint there. I just like difficult areas that really give you a sense of accomplishment once you finally get em, is all.
The bit with the tea, I assume you're talking about all the criss-crossing....girder....things? You're probably right there. That might change in the future

Thanks for the input!

[RacingCreed]

Looks awesome, quite alike the level i'm currently working on.

I've added this level to my queue, and will play it and review it after college.
In return, please try and review my level.
http://lbp.me/v/w66e4v

Much appreciated,

RacingCreed.

[Dietomaha]

Absolutely, sounds fun. Queued it up!

[RedShadow_88]

Hey!
Just played it, so here's my review:

I liked the idea of jumping through a bookshelf! And the thing with the twin is funny, too!
Gameplay was good and visuals, too. Still there were some nasty edges, would check them!

Find it a bit weird using the Hamster 3000 of the Story mode as a donut, but I always love this thing so it is okay. And hey: I'm riding a DONUT! xD
But I missed the overview in the labyrinth of that part. Just put in a camera which zooms out!

Then I saw a magic mouth at the cup of tea. Should disable view ability of it.
Well, I pushed down the cup and sled with it, fell in the whole and it trapped me. Would fix that, too!

The buttons in the cheese sections were nasty. If you push them two times, the doors close again. (I think you used toggles for that)
Try using a counter which counts up to 1. If you press the button again, the counter does nothing. (a perfect permanent switch)

At the end of the level I entered the controllinator of the donut and jumped out of the level. Fix that, too!

Well, to sum it up: I 'Yay'ed it. It was fun and thats good!

[Dietomaha]

Great feedback, thank you. Everything you've suggested sounds like a good idea As for the donut hamster thing, I resorted to this because I couldn't get one to work on my own lol. I still do plan on changing that eventually, once I figure out how to make one boost like the hamster, which so far I've had no luck with :P

Everything else will get a change though, thanks

[Aselrahc]

Played this last night. It's a lot of fun! I noticed the same problems already mentioned above. If you fix those things you'll have a great, polished level!

[Dietomaha]

I fixed all the stuff that needed fixing (except a custom donut, but it's coming), if anyone would like to give it another go.

Thanks for all the feedback

[Foofles]

JUst played it, it's cute and challenging. Donut riding is cool but you should think about putting score bubbles or something in the path, it would make flying through the path a lot more satisfying

Epic cheese intro.

[onaga666]

Okay I played it, very charming, but it isn't really designed for multiplayer is it?
So my advice, either say "1 player only" or add extra donuts for the other players to ride
Could you try my level? click here

[agsrule]

Hi! Played your level and I really found it excellent, added to my hearted purely on merit! The concept was funny yet charming and the overall level design was varied and colourful. Just one or two very small niggles - I found the coloured gas descent a bit challenging due to camera angle and speed of the winch, that could use a little tweaking, and also the cheese basketball section had a camera angle that didn't show the bounce pads so took me a while to figure out what to do. And if I'm being very picky, the tea cup seems to be made out of concrete or something as I struggled to push it lol!

But those are just very small irritants in an otherwise brilliant level - 9/10 from me!