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    Default Natural gravity (platformer)

    Hi, i present you my new platformer level called "natural gravity". In this level, you walk in a pretty forest wich hang in the space . I hope you'll have fun ^^ : http://lbp.me/v/b2pk2y

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    I'm frensh and I'm 14, sorry if my english isn't perfect ^^'

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    Okay, I have played your level, and here's what I thought. (Please note I reviewed this while playing, so I usually like to go by reviewing things from start to finish.)

    Okay, things start off quite nicely, with beautiful music, and a serene way of popping up your name. I'm thrown into a beautiful scenery, with a nice mix of Vera Bee stickers and Move pack decos, setting the scene. Not long after moving, am I greeted with this little scene.

    http://lbp.me/p/qq1sqzc

    I liked how you continued trying to show off the nature feel with that little waterfall scene, but it feels a little....too much. It's kind of like how some women will take off one piece of jewelry, and I think that's something the scene above should do. Maybe take off off the moving green branch sticker, and one or two other things, but maybe that's just me. Besides that, nice job, although instead of leaving the bottom-left corner of the scene empty, maybe add some more water at the end of the scene, or, since it's in space, perhaps a few stars or fragments of water floating out, or something, idk. The use of stickers and decos is done very well here, and I love the leaves floating around the place.

    The black background reinforces that you're in space, but I feel more could be done to convey the message that this is a mix of both themes, like adding stars like I said before, or maybe have fragments of the land sort of aimlessly floating around, drifting away. There is a nice variety of sounds placed in, and I like how you added some colorful lighting to the sets of moving point bubbles spread around the level. As you fall down though, before arriving in the area in the picture below, I think some sounds could be thrown in, and maybe some rocks falling?

    http://lbp.me/p/qq2v4gd

    Overall , this was a nice and fun level. The lighting, and use of decos/stickers were great, even if there was a couple moments where things felt a bit crowded. The gameplay works, although nothing major, which is fine, as visuals seem to take over in this one. What also took over was the theme of nature, where, if it wasn't for the description and the blue space-y background you'd see in certain parts of the level, you might not think it was in space. I think that could be fixed by adding things to the background and surroundings like floating objects and perhaps visible stars, so not only is it an enchanted forest, it's an enchanted forest secluded from all kinds of life, far out in the depths of space.
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    Wow! Thank you for this awesome comment, I've really appreciated! Your advices are very useful, it will help me to improve the level. But I don't know if the Thermometer will like lol ^^ ! And I think I'll put your last sentence ( it's an enchanted forest secluded from all kinds of life, far out in the depths of space.) in the level's description, it's sounds perfect :P .

    Thank you again
    I'm frensh and I'm 14, sorry if my english isn't perfect ^^'

    My lbp.me : http://lbp.me/u/alain251

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    This sounds pretty sweet , I added it to my queue and can't wait playing it

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    Quote Originally Posted by alain251 View Post
    Wow! Thank you for this awesome comment, I've really appreciated! Your advices are very useful, it will help me to improve the level. But I don't know if the Thermometer will like lol ^^ ! And I think I'll put your last sentence ( it's an enchanted forest secluded from all kinds of life, far out in the depths of space.) in the level's description, it's sounds perfect :P .

    Thank you again
    Any time, and I'm glad you didn't take any of my criticisms the wrong way. You've got a knack for stickers/decos I must say, and if you're able to squeeze in any of those suggestions I threw at you, then I'd be happy to play it again, just make sure to message me about it. ^^

    Oh, and thanks. I'm not usually that..."quotable".

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    I'll probably modificate this level, and perhaps also the the previous one's ^^
    I'm frensh and I'm 14, sorry if my english isn't perfect ^^'

    My lbp.me : http://lbp.me/u/alain251

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    Your level is really beutifull. The set and the lighting are wonderfull.
    It's a traditionnal platformer i enjoyed going trhough.

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    I'm really glad you enjoyed ^^
    I'm frensh and I'm 14, sorry if my english isn't perfect ^^'

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    DV always gives great reviews doesn't he. Great job Dragon.
    I enjoyed this level. You've created a nice environment, the aesthetics are pleasing and there is some good solid gameplay. Good work.

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    Thank you for this comment biorogue
    I'm frensh and I'm 14, sorry if my english isn't perfect ^^'

    My lbp.me : http://lbp.me/u/alain251


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